Mia's draft states her claim clearly and supports it with two reasons, but she spells 'definitely' as 'definately' three times. What does her draft need next?

The second section of Jon's report on tides never explains why the moon matters to tides. What kind of change does the draft need?

Ana is writing feeding instructions for third graders to use with the class hamster. Her draft tells them to place 'sustenance' in the bowl. What is the best change for this audience?

Wren reads her draft aloud and notices that four sentences in a row begin with 'Then.' What kind of change does this call for?

Deb has rewritten her opening three times, and readers still say her essay argues for two different claims at once. What is her best next move?

Sam's task is to inform classmates about how a bill becomes a law. His draft ends by urging readers to call their senators tonight. What should he do?

Leo is writing to the school board to request a longer lunch period. His draft calls the current schedule 'totally bogus.' What is the best revision for that audience?

Nina's task is a personal narrative about the evening her dog went missing. Her draft says only, 'I felt bad.' Which revision best develops the draft for that task?

Ray's article must cover both volcano eruptions and volcano tourism, but his paragraphs jump back and forth between the two. What kind of change does the draft need?

Priya's readers say her essay stops right after her last example. Which peer comment gives her something she can act on?

Tom's story about a thunderstorm feels flat, so he rewrites it as diary entries by the dog hiding under the bed. Which writing step is Tom using?

Kim writes results for classmates who finished the same experiment last period. Her draft spends a paragraph defining 'thermometer.' What should she do?

Owen's teacher notes that his claim 'skateboarding builds balance' has no support. Which revision fixes that weakness?

Dana argues that the school day should start later. Which addition best supports that claim?

Eli's field report must record exact observations. His draft says the bean plant 'got bigger.' Which revision best fits that purpose?

Rosa's draft reads, 'Covered in mud, Ben carried the bike upstairs.' She means the mud to describe the bike. Which revision does that?

Which peer comment praises a draft without giving the writer anything to change?

Grace has not yet decided which reasons to keep in her draft. Why should she revise for content before editing her commas?

Ken's task is to compare two bike helmets. His draft describes the first helmet's price, weight, and straps in detail and stops there. What does the draft need next?

Nia has trimmed her essay on space twice, and it still covers rockets, planets, and stars without developing any of them. What is her best next move?

Zed's draft defines 'habitat' in its very first line. Which peer comment should he act on?

Ali writes a newsletter piece for parents who have never seen the school garden. Which addition best fits that audience?

Bea's draft contains this line on its own: 'Because the river flooded in April.' What does that line need?

Cara is writing stair-safety reminders for first graders. Which sentence best fits that audience?

Kate deletes an entire paragraph because it repeats her second reason without adding anything. What kind of change is this?

Ben's first paragraph gives a cause and his second gives its effect, but nothing signals the link between them. Which revision fixes that weakness?

Sara's directions for planting seeds run as one long paragraph, and readers keep losing their place mid-task. What is her best next move?

Milo writes for the science club, which uses the term 'condensation' every week. His draft says 'water sticking on the glass.' What fits this audience best?

Four peers commented on Rob's draft. Which comment names a change he can make today?

Jae's draft claims the club grew all year, but the membership numbers printed in his own draft fall every month. What should he do next?

Rita's book review for the school newspaper says the author 'is clearly clueless.' Which revision best fits the purpose of a review?

Which problem in a draft calls for revising rather than editing?

Otto's assignment asks him to explain why bees matter. His draft lists ten facts about bees and explains none of them. What does it need next?

Wes finished a formal report, then learned his real audience is a group of kindergartners at story time. What is his best next move?

A peer tells Luz that her example about plastic bags does not match her claim about paper recycling. Which revision shows she used the comment?

Nash argues for later bus times and never mentions the objection that drivers' schedules would have to change. What should he add?

Milla's guide must stay brief. Draft: 'Due to the fact that it is raining, we will, at this point in time, stay inside.' Which revision keeps both ideas?

Hana's hallway poster text must be readable in about five seconds, but her draft opens with three sentences of background before the request. What should she do?

A sentence can be grammatically correct and still need revising because it does not fit the writer's purpose.

A writer tries a new approach to a draft mainly to fix spelling and punctuation errors.