Which revision cuts the deadwood without losing information? "At this point in time, the committee is still in the process of reviewing the applications."

Which version says the same thing in the fewest words? "Each and every one of the runners received a free gift at the end of the race when it was over."

Which revision removes the repetition and keeps the writer's point? "In my own personal opinion, I think that the new bell schedule is better for students."

Which is the tightest revision that keeps every fact? "The reason why the experiment failed is because the water temperature was too high."

Which revision cuts the padding without cutting information? "We were able to successfully complete the project in a timely manner and on schedule."

Which revision fixes the repetition and still gives the time and the place? "The two twins arrived early at the field at 6 a.m. in the morning."

Which revision drops the empty opening and keeps the finding? "It is important to note that the survey results show a decline in attendance."

Which revision is shortest without losing meaning? "In order to be able to enter the contest, students must first submit an entry form beforehand."

Which choice makes this sentence precise? "The nurse wrote that the patient's ___ had gone up since morning."

Which choice gives the reader exact information? "The mechanic said the ___ under the hood was causing the rattle."

Which revision replaces the vague description with a precise one? "The witness said the car went past the intersection very fast."

Which choice makes the request precise? "The custodian asked the band to move their ___ out of the hallway."

Which verb makes this sentence precise? "When the fire alarm sounded, the students ___ toward the exit."

Which choice replaces the vague quantity with a precise one? "The report says the tutoring program helped ___ students last year."

Which revision replaces the vague praise with evidence? "The coach told the paper that Maya had a good game on Friday."

Which choice makes this sentence precise? "The company blamed the shipping delay on a ___ at the port."

Which revision puts the actor in the subject and the action in the verb? "An investigation of the water main break was conducted by the city engineers."

Which version names the doer as the subject and states the action as the verb? "The announcement of the schedule change was made by the principal on Friday."

Which revision does the work in the verb instead of a noun? "A recommendation was made by the committee that the club buy new uniforms."

Which revision moves the action into the verb? "The performance of the experiment was carried out by our lab group in second period."

Which revision names who acted and what they did? "There was a delay in the delivery of the yearbooks by the printer."

Which revision puts the decider in the subject? "It was decided by the debate team that the fundraiser would be moved to April."

Which revision states the actor and the action directly? "The completion of the mural by the art club took place over spring break."

A writer changed "The committee members met together at 3 p.m. in the afternoon" to "The committee met at 3 p.m." What did the revision fix?

A writer changed "It is important to note that the deadline is March 3" to "The deadline is March 3." What did the revision fix?

A writer changed "The storm damaged a lot of the stuff in the shed" to "The storm soaked the mower and three bags of grass seed in the shed." What did the revision fix?

A writer changed "A review of the bus schedule was completed by the counselors" to "The counselors reviewed the bus schedule." What did the revision fix?

A writer changed "Covered in mud, Elena photographed the pickup truck" to "Elena photographed the pickup truck, which was covered in mud." What did the revision fix?

A writer changed "The town cut the bus routes. Ridership fell by half." to "The town cut the bus routes. As a result, ridership fell by half." What did the revision fix?

A writer changed "The team made a decision to practice on Saturday" to "The team decided to practice on Saturday." What did the revision fix?